A First Page Critique opportunity from Electric Spec Editors

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The fine editors over at Electric Spec are doing a fantastic thing on their blog.  They're offering free critiques of the first page of your story!  I've posted mine, and so far it looks as though I'm going to get great feedback.  You know as a writer, you have the story in your head so clear, and you might *think* you've given the reader enough opportunity and hints to see what's going on and coming, but you don't ever know for sure.  I tend to let my stories play out slowly, too slowly it seems.

Anyway, simple rules are posted on their blog on the Nov. 16 entry.  Their blog is at Blogspot:  electricspec at blogspot.com

First page only, limit 200 words. 

Here's the link:  ElectricSpec Mini-slush Game