Home again! And Realms of Fantasy

I was gone for 4 days and boy was my flist busy during that time.  I've caught up, but now I have to answer/thank critters.  My story has some definite issues.  The good thing is that everyone seems to have the same questions so far.  The solution is to add another scene in the story to show the details that readers feel are missing.  That's going to make for a much longer story, and first I need a reason for that scene.  That'll take some thinking.  It's not that I don't know those details, it's that they haven't come up in the course of the story, and just throwing them in here and there would reek of info-dump. -- "Say, what's that you're eating there, Molokai?"  "Oh, just a little scramble of tunnel snake egg -- which my father died trying to steal, as do about half the population of our cave-land -- along with some moth larvae, followed by a rich helping of mineral-laden water.  Yum!"  Nope.  Not working.

In my on-going quest to become a better synopsis-er and critiquer and all that, here's my version of a review of the February 2008 issue of Realms of Fantasy -- hidden behind the cut for those of you who don't wish to partake.

REALMS OF FANTASY - February 2008

 

( Review of RoF Stories -- Read more... )